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good stuff. More location, description of surroundings would help. seeing the action is easy...but i don't know where it is happening.
when thor's hammer is stopped...there's nothing to say why...the story makes a rule-that thor's hammer is lethal, then breaks it-the protagionist stops it, and there's no explanation.
picky things i guess, but it's a cool story, and i think you could really take it somewhere. thanks for sharing it with us!
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