my first comic strip
 

a little formuliac, but...

probably spelled that wrong also...

Maybe if your handwriting wasn't so cryptic... What does it say in panel 2? Something about a matter of magnetism.

I believe the second panel reads: "Fool! You dare attack the master of magetism with METAL weapons?"

Rachel Bilson is a little bit flatter than I remember her, but I enjoyed the rest of the comic. ;)

-Tamerlain

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this one has some colour!

if you get a software like photoshop, you could add your colour digitaly. it would look so much better. also, i recommend typing the text in because your hand writting is not readable for me. i dont know what's happening in the 1st one. 2nd is a bit better.

keep it up! lets see where this goes.

I don't get it! What's going on?? Who's Rachel Bilson?? I'm so confused!! Aughhhhhh........

My question is... is this supposed to be art? You could spend some time reading some comic books, tracing the drawings in them with thicker and thicker sheets of paper until you are drawing on your own. Think of it as using training wheels.

I would take mexicanonabikes suggestion and use photoshop for your lettering.

The images seem very two dimensional, try adding some background in perspective, maybe even zoom in on some of the characters instead of keeping the camera so far away.

this one shows the sensitive side of Magneto/Adam - and the story here has a lot more depth.

I took on board some of the stuff about shifting perspective to create emphasis. I dont mean to blow my own trumpet, but this is hott.

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ok...

in the first piece.

A man wearing a metal suit of armour attacks Adam

Adam uses his magnetic power to strip away the armour and weapons

Adam kicks the enemy into a crocodile pit

Adam and Rachel celebrate
___

the second piece

Rachel Bilson is walking along

A guy is talking on his phone and driving at 90 MPH and is about to run her down

Adam uses his magnetic powers to lift up the car at the last moment and throw into a dynamite shed, causing an explosion which kills the driver

Adam and Rachel hold hands <3

_____

I assume the third piece shall speak for itself???

And Rachel Bilson is an actress, and the love interest of Adam Magneto (the Mutant Master of Magnetism)

hmm.... better writting or use a software cuz this is impossible to read and possibly the reason so many ppl didnt reply.

I thought it was very funny.