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Halx · 07-01-2003, 10:16 PM

(A little free verse off the top of my head.)

a ghost of the future, I hope
she who draws my gaze from the road
my smiles are all for you
and laughs too for your hearing pleasure
as they bounce off the walls of my empty room
you've come back through time
keeping me company, warming your seat in my heart
my hidden gold which nobody sees
that makes them wonder how I get by
when I feel you there beside me all along
time is my only worry

J.R.V.A. · 07-02-2003, 07:08 AM

You should look at the top of that head more often, and post some more. This is really good, thanks for sharing.

Angel · 07-02-2003, 04:02 PM

Well you don't post much here, but when you do, you do it with a completeness that leaves me in awe!
Thank you for one more...I await the next.

*Nikki* · 07-02-2003, 05:27 PM

Excellent boss. As always....you have so much to give.

Minx · 07-03-2003, 11:17 AM

You really should post more often.....such great work.
Thank you for giving yet one more part of yourself to us.

little limey · 07-17-2003, 10:10 AM

I want to comment on this piece, saying what i liked exactly about it, but I can't say. It just all fits together.

It is so relaxing and gives me an almost nastalgic feeling (i dunno how to spell that).

Eowyn_Vala · 08-01-2003, 07:01 AM

I like this piece. I know that I will continue to think about it for quite some time.

chavos · 08-01-2003, 10:08 AM

Quote:

keeping me company, warming your seat in my heart

I love that line...i've got people like that, with reserved seating, front row...even if they've been gone too long.

Great images and great emotion...

maximus · 08-02-2003, 10:35 AM

great post halx, and thank you for this place in the universe where we can come to share ourselves.

07-01-2003, 10:16 PM	#1 (permalink)
Halx Please touch this. Owner/Admin Location: Manhattan	excuses (A little free verse off the top of my head.) a ghost of the future, I hope she who draws my gaze from the road my smiles are all for you and laughs too for your hearing pleasure as they bounce off the walls of my empty room you've come back through time keeping me company, warming your seat in my heart my hidden gold which nobody sees that makes them wonder how I get by when I feel you there beside me all along time is my only worry __________________ You have found this post informative. -The Administrator [Don't Feed The Animals]

07-02-2003, 07:08 AM	#2 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	You should look at the top of that head more often, and post some more. This is really good, thanks for sharing. __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart

07-02-2003, 04:02 PM	#3 (permalink)
Angel Naughty Just Right Location: Euphoria	Well you don't post much here, but when you do, you do it with a completeness that leaves me in awe! Thank you for one more...I await the next. __________________ In the depth of winter, I finally learned that there was within me an invincible summer. ~Albert Camus

07-03-2003, 11:17 AM	#5 (permalink)
Minx Junkie Location: Up yonder	You really should post more often.....such great work. Thank you for giving yet one more part of yourself to us. __________________ You've been a naughty boy....go to my room!

08-01-2003, 07:01 AM	#7 (permalink)
Eowyn_Vala Insane Location: There's no place like home..	I like this piece. I know that I will continue to think about it for quite some time. __________________ Cain: I know what you're doing. I've lead troops into battle before. DG: And, how am I doing? Cain: Well, there's less hugging when I do it

07-02-2003, 05:27 PM	#4 (permalink)
Nikki ~~~~~~~ Location: Charleston, SC	Excellent boss. As always....you have so much to give.

07-17-2003, 10:10 AM	#6 (permalink)
little limey Psycho Location: Room Nineteen	I want to comment on this piece, saying what i liked exactly about it, but I can't say. It just all fits together. It is so relaxing and gives me an almost nastalgic feeling (i dunno how to spell that).

08-02-2003, 10:35 AM	#9 (permalink)
maximus Crazy Location: Pa	great post halx, and thank you for this place in the universe where we can come to share ourselves. __________________ i don't want to be lonely, i just want to be alone.