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starlite · 07-08-2003, 09:57 PM

Get out
Get out
I cant stand this
It hurts
Just leave
Get out

Pain, agony
Breathless, struggling
Run, hide
Screaming
Panic
Gasping for air

Leave me alone
Why me
Why me
Cold, wet
Limping
Hurt

Caught
Cant move, cant yell
Metal flesh
Trigger
Lightening
Silence

Stillborn · 07-11-2003, 11:37 AM

Sounds almost like lyrics for a Nu-Metal band.

Briz9 · 07-14-2003, 08:54 PM

Hey Sarah,
I'm hardly one to critique poetry. But, it sounds pretty cool to me. There are very little words, but it paints a pretty detailed picture. Thanks for sharing.

07-08-2003, 09:57 PM	#1 (permalink)
starlite Upright Location: Kansas	Nightmare Get out Get out I cant stand this It hurts Just leave Get out Pain, agony Breathless, struggling Run, hide Screaming Panic Gasping for air Leave me alone Why me Why me Cold, wet Limping Hurt Caught Cant move, cant yell Metal flesh Trigger Lightening Silence __________________ I try to write my feelings so I will right now. . . I only post to get feed back. I think its a little rude when you read and dont even bother to make a little comment. Please do because this helps me a great deal. Thank you ~Sarah~

07-11-2003, 11:37 AM	#2 (permalink)
Stillborn Tilted Location: Dingden, DE / Centennial, CO	Sounds almost like lyrics for a Nu-Metal band. __________________ Waiting... to be born again Wanting... the saddest kind of pain Waiting for the day when I will crawl away

07-14-2003, 08:54 PM	#3 (permalink)
Briz9 Crazy	Hey Sarah, I'm hardly one to critique poetry. But, it sounds pretty cool to me. There are very little words, but it paints a pretty detailed picture. Thanks for sharing.