fallen_angel

Im the lie, living for you
So you dont have to cry
Im the hidden burden
Upon your wicked soul
Ive bleed for you
Ive died for you
Im falling forever
Cursed by you

Ill save myself this time
Maybe Ill wake up before Im gone
Im trying to convince myself you're not real
But the whispers in my head tell me the truth
Forgotten shadows of a past life
Leaving me to your decided fate
Im the lie, living for you
So you dont have to cry

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from the Havens I have fallen. . . to the earth as a mangled form. . . writhing in pain, my wings torn and bloodied. . . I have one purpose, only one goal. . . to find you and love you, for I am your. . . fallen angel

ForgottenKnight

Sadness!.....I'm sorry that you're feeling that way. You're way too good of a person. You deserve happiness, not sorrow!

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*Nikki*

I really liked those lines.

Great work as usual. Much sadness there behind those words.

fallen_angel

you know what the fun part is , i dont even have to think when i write these. . .

I have forsaken all who loved me
I have fallen from heavens door
I am dancing with the devel
In his all so human form
I am here within the midnights light
Forcefully bowed before you . . .

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from the Havens I have fallen. . . to the earth as a mangled form. . . writhing in pain, my wings torn and bloodied. . . I have one purpose, only one goal. . . to find you and love you, for I am your. . . fallen angel

minyn

I highly encourage merging your many threads into one like NiceGuy. would be easier to read all of your lit that way.

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~A3 "woke up this morning"

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fallen_angel

what am i not allowed to post single threads??
i would probably lose my big thread cuz no one really responds to them so they just disappear like all my other work. . .

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from the Havens I have fallen. . . to the earth as a mangled form. . . writhing in pain, my wings torn and bloodied. . . I have one purpose, only one goal. . . to find you and love you, for I am your. . . fallen angel

minyn

they put a notice encouraging single, consise threads of lit, not just single threads for one peom. if you had a big thread it woudl be more updated and compiled and potentially people would respond

Just try it and see.

edit - read redravins Notice. its in there.

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"Don't compromise yourself, you're all you've got." -Janis Joplin

fallen_angel

k

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from the Havens I have fallen. . . to the earth as a mangled form. . . writhing in pain, my wings torn and bloodied. . . I have one purpose, only one goal. . . to find you and love you, for I am your. . . fallen angel

*Nikki*

I see nothing wrong with the single thread......she is right...sometimes work does "get lost" in a big thread.

fallen_angel

ook hold up whos side ya on ?? my thing is not as many people respond to a massive thread cuz theres so much material but a single thread lets them express different oppinions for each and half the time its weeks before i post something new
i will merge them when i have time but im really busy and my life comes before organizing my poetry, sorry

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from the Havens I have fallen. . . to the earth as a mangled form. . . writhing in pain, my wings torn and bloodied. . . I have one purpose, only one goal. . . to find you and love you, for I am your. . . fallen angel

minyn

its fine, just taking what ive seen from niceguy's thread.

just an idea.

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"Woke up this morning with a blue moon in my eye"
~A3 "woke up this morning"

"Don't compromise yourself, you're all you've got." -Janis Joplin

Eowyn_Vala

hmmm that first poem sounds way too much like some of the songs from Evanescence, but still good

the second piece was short but i liked it, more so than the first

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Cain: I know what you're doing. I've lead troops into battle before.
DG: And, how am I doing?
Cain: Well, there's less *hugging* when I do it

fallen_angel

uhh ya done told you before that thats what started the whole poem. . .

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from the Havens I have fallen. . . to the earth as a mangled form. . . writhing in pain, my wings torn and bloodied. . . I have one purpose, only one goal. . . to find you and love you, for I am your. . . fallen angel

Eowyn_Vala

i had thought that you said that sometimes the lyrics inspire you to write poetry and you'll start poetry out from a lyric of a song, which is different from mixing a few songs together and changing some of the wording or phrases to songs. I didn't say it wasn't bad or anything. I like it, it just sounds more like Evanescence than you. The second piece to me seems much more original. Hence why I like it more than the first.

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Cain: I know what you're doing. I've lead troops into battle before.
DG: And, how am I doing?
Cain: Well, there's less *hugging* when I do it

losthellhound

great stuff, I really like it. Its powerfull stuff

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-- Ernest Becker, The Denial of Death

Esen

:O

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